Constructive Cover Letter Advice?
This letter is an expression of interest in obtaining a position with your company. Fortune has bestowed many professional and educational experiences and skills in the flooring industry and business management, which have allowed for development of abilities in customer service, installation, multi tasking and computer oriented tasks.
Professional exposure has been cultivated by multiple business classes, education through professional associations, hands-on training, sales, remote and on-site management, bookkeeping and accounting, as well as interactions on all levels of corporate; dealing with company policies and procedures, network support solutions, and human resources.
Educational exposure has promoted proficiency in traditional and cutting edge technology, management, marketing and advertising. Software programs such as Quickbooks, Microsoft Word, Publisher, Excel, Outlook; Adobe Photoshop and Illustrator have been used thoroughly.
Benefits of detailed daily schedules; personal daily goals as well as the constant strive for perfection are produced by personal best in all facets of work. Efficiency, accountability, hard work, as well as the need to attain goals and constantly strive for higher potential are combined with experience and an ability to learn quickly and efficiently.
It would be a pleasure to meet with you in regards to a demonstration of abilities in the hardwood flooring industry and discuss how they may fit your needs. Thank you for your time and consideration.
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Okay so here it goes…
First off, you keep using the term "exposure" like professional exposure, educational exposure. I’m not sure if you’re just omitting that for security purposes on here or if that’s really what you want. If it is, then you need to consider using some different terms.
Secondly, there is waaaay too much info in there. These things should be reflected in your resume not in your cover letter. On one hand you want to highlight some of the outstanding things on your resume but you don’t want to do a complete blow by blow of it. Instead of listing all the things you accomplished in, scale it down and sell YOU.
I don’t know what your resume looks like but it should include most of the stuff you’re listing. I weed through hundreds of apps and resumes every week at my job and if I got this cover letter I would have tossed it before I got through the second paragraph. I’m not trying to be mean, I’m just letting you know from a recruiters point of view what might happen.
A few good rules of thumb you may want to think about:
1.Three to Maybe-if-you-have-to four paragraphs
2.This is like an ad for you, sell yourself-the real you, not just your education. Think like a radio or tv commercial. Keep it professional but energetic- read yours out loud to yourself and see if you don’t get bored yourself.
3.Try and find the name of the person you’re sending it to so you can address it to them directly.
4. Mention the company’s name in the letter.
5. Tell the company what you can do for THEM not just your skills… again that’s what the resume is for.
6. Keep it brief. No recruiter wants to read a novel, they don’t have time. Get your points across precisely and without the lists and overuse of ‘fancy’ words.
It seems like you have an amazing amount of experience and skill so you should have an easy time finding a good position… if you sell yourself and get a good resume and cover letter together. Good luck!!
Yeesh – this needs to be short and sweet, and written in plain English instead of the stilted language you’re using here. How about:
"Dear (Hiring Manager’s Name);
Plese accept this letter as an expression of interest in obtaining a position with your company. I have over X years of experience in business management in the flooring industry, including sales, estimating, bookkeeping, installation, and managing subcontractors (or whatever it is you know.)
I also have an extensive education in a variety of business software and operational activities. At your convenience, please contact me to schedule an interview so that we can discuss in more detail how my qualifications would be a match for your requirements.
Sincerely,
You"